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5/29/10

CHANGE in a BOTTLE... CENTUS #4

I'm participating in Saturday Centus,
hosted by Jenny Matlock.
Visit her to see how others formed a short story from this weeks prompt.

WEEK 4 PROMPT
“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”
“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.


Here's what I've done with it..



Where is she, we should be into the first phase by now...

The months of planning. The nights alone in that dingy motel room with the neon light, it's endless motion of going off and on, off and on. Hours of looking through night goggles, watching every move in the building. The delicious, enchanting thrill of knowing we could do this. 


The building is empty now except for the security guard. Hope his last meal was his favorite...

It's a good plan. Fast, hi tech and flawless. Hope she gassed up the Lamborghini.. 

Where the hell is she?


gasp....



“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”

“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.






 

9 comments:

cj Schlottman said...

I love a cliffhanger! Thanks for this provocative story..........

Sue said...

Woah, my mind is now racing almost as fast as a Lamborghini....I want to know how this ends!

Sue:)

easternsparkle said...

All of the above - what happens next?? Need to know!!

jfb57 said...

I'm completely muddle - just how it should be in a mystery! Well done!

PⒿ @ $ € € ₦$ ₣®0₥... said...

A DELICIOUS PIECE OF WORK. I have just read it at 5:30 on Sunday morning, so I'll do my bestest on our deal.... :)

Cheryl said...

Hanging on waiting for more. Um, could you point me in the right direction so I can find the rest?

Jenny said...

What?!? What!?!

I need more.

Send more of the story.

Immediately.

Or the security guard gets it.

Caroljs said...

Great job, we want more!

Kat said...

Great story, love the "tag team" entries! I think we need more please! Kathy