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6/12/10

CHANGE in a BOTTLE...CENTUS #6

I'm participating in Saturday Centus,
hosted by JENNY MATLOCK
Visit her to see how others formed a short story from this weeks prompt.

Here's what I've done with it...



It’s true, the smell of freshly mowed grass can stay with you for years, for decades, allowing the goosebumps to again surface...

Summer breezes blow so cool down by the pond and that's where I was going. Bare feet, my favorite cotton dress, a glass of sweet lemonade Mama made that morning.

And thoughts of him...

This was my quiet place hidden across the meadow. I could peel the confinement of society away, slowly sink my bare skin into the cool, calming water and dream myself far away.

That's where I was when I heard the voice. So soothing, so confident, so enticing.

Maybe I was lost in deep thoughts, only wishing to hear it....






10 comments:

Viki said...

Wow, My favorite line was "I could peel the confinement of society away, slowly sink my bare skin into the cool, calming water and dream myself far away." Where did this come from LOL? I just loved that line. The whole post was great. Good job.

Kat said...

Beautifully written! I could feel the grass under my bare feet, the soft cotton of the dress against bare legs. Loved it! Kathy

easternsparkle said...

Another one where we need more!! Well written, very descriptive!

Lady Banana said...

Very nice start to a story that definitely needs more!

Terra said...

Very descriptive lines, painted the picture - Very well done!

Tina said...

uw who could i be i wonder? very cool :)

I have my first centus up!

http://www.mummy-diaries.com/2010/06/saturday-centus-returned.html

Koby said...

I'd like to visit that pond...very enjoyable story.

Tgoette said...

Wow, that was great! Loved all the detailed imagery and a nice cliffhanger at the end to boot!

Amazing what we can squeeze into so few words! I liked it.

jeff campbell said...

Such a fine turn on this week's prompt:-) Very well written...I can feel the setting...Peace and blessings

Jenny said...

Wow. Sultry, hot... I can feel that cool water trickling down and the sharp tang of the lemonade hitting the back of my throat with a tickle.

Wonderful, descriptive tight writing here.

Thank you for linking this.